雅思寫作對許多考生來說是個難點，為什么滿分是9分的作文我們只考了4分呢?下面環(huán)球教育我來分析一下雅思4分作文的不足之處在哪，一起來了解吧
一般來說要想申請不錯的國外大學的話雅思成績較好是7分或者7分以上，相對雅思口語來說，雅思寫作也不算中國學生的弱項，因此雅思作文要拿到7分以上，否則很有也許是會拖累雅思的總分數(shù)，下面用雅思4分作文分析的一個例子，一起看一下吧。
Topic
Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree of disagree?
According to universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. Therefore, this essay will show some reasons of argument for and argument against.
Firstly, I will discuss about two reasons of argument for to begin with universities should accept equal numbrs of male and female students in every subject because it will be balance of idea while studying. In general, there usually are different ideas between man and woman. These lead to new ideas from different vision will happen. Another reason is it display that have equal of society not eccept in each side. In addition, nowadays, the most societies become to accept ability of both in any way.
Secondly, I will discuss about one reason of arguments against that is some subjects not suitable for each other. for example, some subjects of sports such as weight putting. It is not suitable for female because there are different of body between male and female.
In conclusion, I agree with universities should accept equal numbers of male an female students in every subject. Moreover, it depend on what the subjects that the students want to study, they can choose by themselves because I believe that if the students like to study their subjects, they will do it well so that I strongly agree with this topic.
老師點評4分的主要失分點
首先，該童鞋在語法上的缺陷是致命的，多數(shù)句子都不符合英語句子結(jié)構(gòu)的要求，如：These lead to new ideas from different vision will happen. Lead to已經(jīng)是謂語動詞了，后面再出現(xiàn)will happen是錯誤的，要知道后一個動詞需要采取去動詞性質(zhì)處理：This will lead to new ideas from different perspectives happening 其實這句話也很羅嗦，完全可以改成：This will lead to a wider variety of ideas.
另外一句： Another reason is it display that have equal of society not eccept in each side. 更是無法理解了， is, display, have 及accept 統(tǒng)統(tǒng)是動詞形態(tài)在句子中出現(xiàn)，但又沒有從句將這些動詞分開，連成功解密過無數(shù)學生天書的我也不能理解他究竟想講什么了。
非常不幸的是在中國龐大的考鴨軍團中，有1/2以上的考鴨們寫出來的英語句子與這位考生寫的同樣晦澀難懂。如果你的英語句子也存在這樣的基本語法錯誤的話，我的建議是趕緊花上3-4天的時間解決這個問題，然后再move on到雅思寫作上。
寫作建議第1：Write in an English way, and make your examiner smile J
按照英文的語法句式寫英文句子。
其次，這篇文章的論證邏輯混亂：第二段他想表達的是招同樣數(shù)量的男女生的好處，第三段要寫專業(yè)的不同會導致招收同樣數(shù)量的男女生是不現(xiàn)實的，收尾段寫道：我同意應該招收同樣數(shù)量的男女生。從上面的兩段看下來，末尾一段要寫的應該是partially agree with the topic 才對—如果專業(yè)有較強的性別取向性，那么該topic不成立;如果專業(yè)對于兩性來說同樣的，那么一半對一半的搭配是值得推薦的。
寫作建議第2: Have your conclusion based on what you have expressed rather than what you have conceived.
你的結(jié)論來自你的文章內(nèi)容，而不是你腦子中憑空構(gòu)思出的。
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