【案例分析】雅思寫作9分?并不是那么遙遠(yuǎn)!

今天帶大看一篇很難得的雅思滿分作文。即便是顧北和劉洪波這些雅思寫作的泰斗，高也只拿了8.5。據(jù)一位雅思寫作考官所說(shuō)，他在8年的工作生涯中，只給過(guò)3次9.0。由此可見(jiàn)，雅思寫作拿9分，簡(jiǎn)直比高考試作文拿滿分還要難。還有一點(diǎn)要注意的就是，雅思復(fù)習(xí)資料復(fù)習(xí)資料后面給出的范文并不是考官寫的滿分作文，而是考官?gòu)目忌淖魑闹刑暨x的。那么，在雅思寫作中是不是必須要舉例子呢？看一下雅思大作文的要求你就知道了。

【案例分析】雅思寫作9分？并不是那么遙遠(yuǎn)！今天帶大看一篇很難得的雅思滿分作文。是一個(gè)母語(yǔ)非英語(yǔ)的外學(xué)生寫的。不知道大對(duì)寫作拿9.0有沒(méi)有概念？整個(gè)中甚至亞洲，雅思寫作得過(guò)滿分的也只是個(gè)位數(shù)。即便是顧北和劉洪波這些雅思寫作的泰斗，高也只拿了8.5。據(jù)一位雅思寫作考官所說(shuō)，他在8年的工作生涯中，只給過(guò)3次9.0。由此可見(jiàn)，雅思寫作拿9分，簡(jiǎn)直比高考試作文拿滿分還要難。
還有一點(diǎn)要注意的就是，雅思復(fù)習(xí)資料復(fù)習(xí)資料后面給出的范文并不是考官寫的滿分作文，而是考官?gòu)目忌淖魑闹刑暨x的。因?yàn)樯厦鎸懙氖恰癟his model has been prepared by an examiner as an example of a very good answer”分?jǐn)?shù)大約在7.5-8.0。所以說(shuō)真正的滿分作文還是很少見(jiàn)的。
好了，我們一起來(lái)欣賞和學(xué)習(xí)一下這篇滿分作文吧。
(文章中間標(biāo)紅的部分為考官寫的評(píng)語(yǔ)。)
Question: Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?
Some museums have an admission charge while some do not. In my opinion, the drawbacks of an entrance fee are eclipsed by its benefits in the sense that the income will be ploughed back into operation and development of the museums.
Excellent. You have outlined what you are going to talk about and at the same time made your opinion very clear. This is exactly what you need to do to make it clear to the examiner what you think about the question and also helps them to follow the rest of your essay.
A major disadvantage of an admission fee is the possibility of reducing the number of visitors. Museums house exhibitions and artifacts of great educational and historical value. If the chief aim of a museum is to introduce the local community, admission should be free to the public and visitors. Take some folk museums in Hong Kong, which preserve historic relics and display folk customs, for example. Admission to these folk museums, which are often monuments, is free of charge. If they had charged an entrance fee, many might have turned to other activities.
Excellent. Clear and relevant main reasons and fully developed idea. It was great to see how you took one central idea and developed it fully with explanations and specific example.
Granted, an entrance fee might have a negative effect on the admission figures, but an income is favorable to museums in terms of operation. Museums feature educational exhibitions at times, and this could not have been done without a sum of money expended on hiring professionals and buying equipment. The Hong Kong Space Museum, for instance, has monthly exhibitions on different issues and professional docents are employed to take visitors on a guided tour around the museum. This example speaks volume about how a reasonable admission charge is disadvantageous to the operation of a museum.
As above, I particularly like the way you linked both main ideas in the first sentence.
In conclusion, the disadvantages of an admission fee are overshadowed by the benefits accruing from a stable source of income. Therefore, having weighed up the pros and cons, I am convinced that museums should charge an entrance fee for the sake of operation and development.
Very elegant conclusion. You have summarised your main points and reiterated your opinion. Well done.
看完這篇文章，我們會(huì)發(fā)現(xiàn)，該考生在二段和三段分別舉了一個(gè)例子來(lái)support自己的觀點(diǎn)。那么，在雅思寫作中是不是必須要舉例子呢？看一下雅思大作文的要求你就知道了。
"Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience."
"and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience."這句話就說(shuō)明，作文中必須要有例子。不僅要有觀點(diǎn)的駁論，更要有中肯的例子來(lái)支撐你的觀點(diǎn)。對(duì)于作文想考7.0+的同學(xué)來(lái)說(shuō)，例子一定不能少，而且舉的例子越貼近西方文化越好，千萬(wàn)不要以自己為例子或者舉自己身邊的例子。這是雅思寫作，不是托福寫作。